Nice letter, I hope you get a good response from it.
I hate to be a poop but in this line is a typo:
The tradeline from GMAC contains the only negative information on my credit files and is the only think keeping me from receiving the best rates that GMAC currently offers. The removal of this negative information would make financing the Saab attainable.
What I really like is the last paragraph, what a nice way to slap someone upside the head.
Please let us know how it works out if you send it